The View from Shore by Jean L. Kreiling

The View from Shore

Not too far out, two paddlers carved their bit
of bay into a pliant stream that held
the solitary kayak they propelled
in perfect synchrony. Their intimate
accord was clear: they’d worked out how to fit
their bodies in the narrow space and meld
their muscled strokes. But my next glance dispelled
illusion; this romance was counterfeit.
What I saw was not one kayak, but two,
joined only by a trick of light and tide
for seconds, not a lifetime. As they drew
apart, each craft distinct, I modified
my story. They were strangers; one breeze blew
them close, the next one parted them and sighed.

by Jean L. Kreiling

Editor’s Note: The alliteration in line one of this sonnet immediately captured my attention, and happily the rest of the poem does not disappoint: sonics, meter, and metaphor draw the reader in before letting go in the last line.


2 responses to “The View from Shore by Jean L. Kreiling”

  1. Robert Bradshaw Avatar
    Robert Bradshaw

    A lovely synchronization of image and theme…I didn’t even notice the rhyme scheme until my second reading…well done!

  2. Ralph Culver Avatar
    Ralph Culver

    Very nice, and I especially enjoyed that the poem’s formal aspects seem so unforced.

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